Dave, Andy, Billy, and Paulo, thanks so much for listening and commenting.
A Tim Burton snap-up would be nice, Andy.
Billy, in biblical legends (especially related to Judaism), Lilith was Adam's first wife, created not from his rib (as Eve was said to be) but from the earth, as he was. Given that they were created equally, Lilith refused to be subordinate to Adam in
any way. Naturally, this led to stress and strife, and she flounced off in a huff and got up to all manner of mischief.
Myth has it that at some point she lived in a cave and had several daughters, all of whom were very, very naughty indeed.
(Actually, I wasn't aware of the daughters bit when I wrote the lyric. I was simply positing that the woman in the song could have been a
daughter of Lilith, complete with her penchant for things shady, in particular where men are concerned.)
Yes, Peter solved the predicament nicely, I think. I'd asked him to keep the vocals upfront and to give the lyrics a melody. I agree with your suggestion about the chorus, and will mention it to him.
Paulo, the imagination is a wonderful thing.
And for what it's worth ...Sometimes I even shock
myself.
Donna